My first impression is that it's nice but there's something wrong with it. After thinking about it for another few moments, it seems that the problem is the lines of the paint job don't complement the lines of the bike. It's not a bad idea, per se, but it just loses something here.
If you look at the lines of the original paint job, you see that the paint is complementary to the bike lines. The rising sun look of all of the others is running counter to thos lines. Part of me wants to suggest that you move the center of the sun back a little bit. That would fix the lines on the nose but it would mess 'em up on the tank.
This is a tough scheme to put to good effect. But good luck. BTW, the Yellow Jacket one almost works because the brilliant color COMPLETELY overcomes the lines of the bike and distracts the eye enough to make it not matter as much.
Just some thoughts!
--Wag--